Rating Blog Comments Out Of 5

  1. Β It doesn’t use proper language, it is probably 2/5 because at least it says from penny.
  2. The has capitals, full stops, commas and question marks, 5/5
  3. It has a question in it and good grammar, but it doesn’t have a comma after Elliot, 3/5
  4. The comment doesn’t say who it is sent to, no capitals for names and spelling mistakes, 2/5
  5. It says who it is from and who it’s sent to and good grammar. 5/5
  6. The comment makes words short like lol, not proper language.1/5
  7. The comment is really short it doesn’t say why,Β  who its from or sent to.3/5
  8. It supports the reason why he shouldn’t be fired, professional words.5/5

Writing challenge – using connectives

In a very quiet village, it snowed almost every day.

Only one person.

but this quiet village wasn’t always be this quiet.

 

There was once a very popular village, the sun was always bright, it only rained once a year.

it had trees with ladders, you could climb them, so many trees, the people who lived there all lived in trees.

they all had an amazing time, children laughing, playing chasey and having a fun is all you could hear.

One day there was intruders who came, they made their leader the king of the village, meanwhile all the kids were screaming and crying to their parents, it was a terrible day.

An effect of, no kids playing laughing, but kids fighting and screaming. The king thought he hadn’t done enough damage so he cut down all the trees, the houses that the people lived in. Despite the people were still in their houses, most people didn’t make it out alive… One little girls parents had an escape patch but only one person could fit, her parents screamed “GO IN! SAVE YOURSELF WE WILL COME BACK ONE DAY!”

Decades past, the king died in war, so did the intruders, but the little girl grew up nd is still living in the village waiting for her parents. That little girl was me..

 

πŸ€ͺMy first blogπŸ€ͺ

β„π•š π•˜π•¦π•ͺ𝕀, 𝕀 π•’π•ž π•ƒπ•šπ•π•šπ•’π•Ÿπ•’, 𝕀 π•’π•ž πŸ™πŸ˜ π•ͺ𝕖𝕒𝕣𝕀 𝕠𝕝𝕕 π•₯π•¦π•£π•Ÿπ•šπ•Ÿπ•˜ πŸ™πŸ™ π• π•Ÿ π•žπ•’π•£π•”π•™ π•₯𝕙𝕖 πŸ™πŸ™π•₯𝕙, 𝕀 𝕙𝕒𝕧𝕖 𝕒 π••π• π•˜ π•Ÿπ•’π•žπ•–π•• β„‚π•™π•’π•”π•™π•š π•’π•Ÿπ•• 𝕒 π•žπ•¦π•ž π•’π•Ÿπ•• π•žπ•ͺ 𝕕𝕒𝕕 π•’π•Ÿπ•• 𝕒 𝕓𝕣𝕠π•₯𝕙𝕖𝕣. 𝕀’π•ž 𝕧𝕖𝕣π•ͺ π•–π•©π•”π•šπ•₯𝕖𝕕 𝕒𝕓𝕠𝕦π•₯ π•¨π• π•£π•œπ•šπ•Ÿπ•˜ π•¨π•šπ•₯𝕙 π•–π••π•¦π•“π•π• π•˜π•€. 𝕄π•ͺ π•—π•’π•§π• π•¦π•£π•šπ•₯𝕖 𝕀𝕦𝕓𝕛𝕖𝕔π•₯ π•šπ•Ÿ 𝕀𝕔𝕙𝕠𝕠𝕝 π•šπ•€ 𝔸𝕣π•₯.

And I love huskies! white and black dog

π•π• π• π•œπ•šπ•Ÿπ•˜ 𝕗𝕠𝕣𝕨𝕒𝕣𝕕 π•₯𝕠 π•¨π• π•£π•œπ•šπ•Ÿπ•˜ π•¨π•šπ•₯𝕙 π•ͺ𝕠𝕦 𝕒𝕝𝕝 𝕩𝕠𝕩𝕠𝕩𝕠